Looking forward to reading more of your works. Try submit in the appropriate forum next time. ? ?

A common tale. Not remarkable, not refreshing, not enlightening... For stories like this commonly told to kids, you need to twist the plot a lot to gi...

Hilarious... But the use of 'it' for a male... Not ideal!

P1... 'Warm embrace', not 'warmth embrace'.

You should also indicate your full name and hashtag for the contest as part of the requirements.

Lacking depth... Avoid use of quotation marks for places.

Very dramatic... ?

Nicely written... ?

S1L7... The word should be 'its', not 'it's'... Several other structural errors are apparent, including poor use of capitalisation.

S1L7... The word should be 'its', not 'it's'... Several other structural errors are apparent, including poor use of capitalisation.

A few structural errors (especially in S5), but it's a nice piece...

S2L3 should be 'The heart is full of worries...'

Nice imagery...

S1L1... Shouldn't the word there be 'shiny', not 'shinny'?

Short, powerful message. ?