S3L3: 'Would you then master decide to deny yourself of pleasures today' You forgot to edit this line.

S3: Pray for me , pray for me! (space before the comma is unnecessary)Sorrows my lips speak, please hearken me. (archaic word, not used when majority ...

And they lived happily ever after!

Could have been coined better... ?

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You've submitted this work previously with the title, Arrival II. We do keep records, you know...

Well done. A few typos and spelling errors. Don't you think the work will be better in stanzas? Have you given that a thought?

Well done. A few typos and spelling errors. E.g. S5L2: I believe the correct expression should be, 'Or the fame he seeks'

Nicely written. Just a few issues. First, the wordings of the title are incorrectly spelled. Should be 'In between', not 'In betweem'. In S6L1, the c...

Nice, but there are plenty issues with concord (subject-verb agreement) in this work. E.g., S2L4: 'As it hungrily eat up their homes with a flow' (hig...

Very nice! The first line of the poem 'If I let go' would have made a more suitable title though.

@whiteink Sure, you can!

Lovely! ? ?

This is much better. Note the following, however: S7L2, L3: Don't tell anyone he said, (insert a comma after 'anyone')I knew then he has stolen my fut...