Last seen: Dec 18, 2022
Needs thorough editing...
Plenty structural & grammatical blunders. For example: ...her seeming indifference towards me and everything I represents have always been a major...
Lovely romantic piece... Not devoid of structural and grammatical errors though. E.g., in S3L6, the word 'is' should be 'it's'.
S1L2: The word there should be 'grew', not 'grow'. Other structural and grammatical errors exist.
Posted in wrong forum. S3L2: The phrase 'a history' should simply be 'history'.
A lot of fundamental issues. I'll mention the most obvious: S2L4: "...and blindings the sun" (That's wrong!) S2L5: "...marrying them into his lonely e...
Faulty structural and grammatical elements are evident throughout the piece. Should be edited. Consider splitting the piece into stanzas as well.
Beautiful! ?? S5L1: The word there should be 'complaints', not 'complains' S62: Word should be 'there', not 'their'
The structuring and grammatical elements in S2 are fundamentally flawed. Needs editing.
Why not split it into stanzas?
'Minion... Colostrum... You really should be more simplistic in your poetry... We offer this advice all the time.
Hmmm
A good parody of 'The adulterous woman' from biblical times... You need to be consistent with the use of tenses. Decide which you wish to use and stic...
"how much does it hurt to be you?" Above shouldn't be a paragraph. Capitalisation should be looked into as well.