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The word 'young' should begin with a small letter throughout the piece, so we don't think you're making reference to someone's name.

S2L2: "Not in the sweet mouth of prophets..." (colloquial expressions like 'sweet mouth' should be in inverted commas)

This should have been enough: "A man who sees, dreams; but a man who acts experiences the reality of what he sees."

'Everyone makes mistake...' (word should be 'mistakes')

Nicely done.

You keep mixing up your rhyming schemes...

Story started well but tailed off in the end...

The first paragraph and many others need to be properly edited (spell check, missing words, tense usage, etc).

Tense usage is rather poor. You started with the past participle, so you must stick with it. 'He rolled from end to end of his high bed, a moved he ha...

A familiar train of thought... Needs a major overhaul.

If you must use rhythm in your poetry, you have to be consistent with whatever pattern you choose.

If you must use rhythm in your poetry, you have to be consistent with whatever pattern you choose.

Deep!

Know when to use singular and plural words, e.g.: 'His face sees many cruelty but still beam with smile' (word should be beams) 'He eats a lot and sti...