Last seen: Dec 18, 2022
And are you implying 'the virus' could be transmitted by eating an orange stained with blood of an infected person? You need to get your facts right.
You need to be consistent with the use of quotation marks in your dialogue. You used it in the opening statement, and that was it.
Story shallow, delivery flat...
You keep making same mistakes, Maynah. Please always use wordcounter.com or any other service to check if your work is within the required limits.
Word count (619 words) exceeds the recommended limit (300-500).
Word count (629 words) exceeds the recommended limit (300-500). Story needs a lot of editing, beginning with the title. Should be, 'Am I guilty?', not...
Story too shallow...
You missed some punctuation here and there, but your descriptions were apt. ?
Needed more fire, more depth... 'He's been on my neck for over almost two years...' should be: 'He's been on my neck for almost (or nearly) two years....
'Effect' in S2L6 should be 'effects'...
'our deceased soul' (S6, L3) should have been 'our deceased souls' to follow the pattern established in the piece. Eg., Our soles (S1L1, S2L1)... Our ...
The 'You' in S3L2 should be in small letters. The 'moon light' in S4L3 should be one word.
The Egyptian princesss... ?
S2L9 should be edited: "Let add some colours to our he(art)s"