Dr. Kennedy O. Obohwemu
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RE: Wildflower

It's beautiful! Would have been better in different stanzas...

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RE: Poverty

You must include your full names. That's a basic rule! Who's Leeman?

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RE: ONE MORE TIME

I can feel you, brother. #NeverEnough

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RE: BROKEN

Stanzas should be organised in a more orderly pattern. A stanza can't have 5 lines and another 1 line, except you stick with this pattern throughout t...

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RE: FATHERFIGURE

S1L2: When my "Fat-Dad" has losses lost his weight, status and vigour. Similar errors are apparent throughout the piece.

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RE: ODE TO STRANGERS

Well done! S1L2: 'Side walk' should be 'sidewalk'. It's a single word.

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RE: DEPARTED HEART

Fantastic piece! Have you posted this somewhere else before?

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RE: A Weeping Heart

Beautiful piece! However, you need to work on the basic grammatical elements, such as subject-verb agreement in sentence construction...

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RE: TRUE HEROS NEVER DIE

And 'heros' should be 'heroes'...

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RE: TRUE HEROS NEVER DIE

Nice poem. However, the subject-verb agreement is defective in virtually all stanzas.

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RE: Greatness

Great men and 'others'... Who are the others? The 'not-so-great-men'?

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RE: CORPORAL PUNISHMENT, RIGHT OR WRONG?

Corporal punishment "is a form of punishment intended to cause physical pain on a person." Is this common knowledge? You should say so if you feel it ...

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RE: PATERNITY TEST

Not particularly suited for Children's Literature.

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RE: My Shameless Husband

Wrong forum. You should click 'April 2019' first, then 'Week 1' before posting your entry. Critiques meant for contests should not be posted in the sa...

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