Dr. Kennedy O. Obohwemu
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RE: BRASS TO GOLD

Nicely done!

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RE: PERFECTION

Nice! A few errors: S2L5: 'With it, the strongest of army is bring to their knees...' (Word there should be 'brought'.)

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RE: THE WAIT

Nicely done!

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RE: IF YOU'D LIKE

Perfecto!!! ??

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RE: THE CRYPTIC MESSAGE

A few errors: She heard four words in a cryptic tone, “DO NOT MARRY HIM”. chills ran down her spine, and she broke out in gooses bumps. “Who is this? ...

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RE: NIGHTMARE

And which contest category is it? Flash fiction? Short story?

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RE: NIGHTMARE

Typos, poor paragraphing, subject-verb disagreement... Try work on these issues.

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RE: A Vegetable Husband 

Lots of typos and structural deficiencies. "He groan as he slowly came to live..." This should be: "He groaned as he slowly came back to life..."

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RE: My Shameless Husband

Not as palatable as anticipated. Nice try though. Learn to properly use punctuation marks in your dialogue.

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RE: LAGOS PARTY

Started well, but the finish wasn't as appetising... A few structural deficiencies in between...

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RE: The Transaction

Well done. Let's just correct a few errors. Consider the statement below, extracted from the text: "My bank do not notify me of any transaction done s...

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RE: THE WAIT

Touching!

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RE: Forever to Forgive

You decided to try again this week...

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