Last seen: Dec 18, 2022
Splendid! ??
A common storyline. Could have done a lot better.
Nice...
Interesting...
Nice!
Nice story. Too many punctuation errors though.
Not a bad attempt. Can do much better. Story was flat, needed more spark, more twists and turns. Structural and grammatical errors were also evident: ...
You can make this look more poetic by dividing the lines into stanzas and introducing relevant poetic devices, including rhythm.
Nicely written. Note, however, that peacemakers is a single word.
Nice poem marred by inconsistent rhythm. You can choose the free verse, it's no crime.
S5L4: 'for your eyes replaces darkness with light.' The word there should be replace, not replaces.
Nice. Your rhyming scheme was inconsistent throughout the piece though.
Perhaps 'Busted' would have been a more suitable title?