Last seen: Dec 18, 2022
Nice depiction of flooding...
Touching! S1L3: I met you and fell for those dazzling smile Should be: I met you and fell for that dazzling smile Or: I met you and fell for those daz...
Can you make this more prosaic?
Not bad.
You may need to paraphrase the wordings in the first paragraph.
An interesting relationship...
Very nice! Correct these errors: S1L2: Your burning strenght (strength) S2L2: Let the flame grow wider that (than) earth's sphere
Nice!
Deep!
Be consistent with your use of rhyming schemes. Correct the following expressions: All lizard lies with their stomach, We can not detect which really ...
Great piece! However, your frequent deployment of inconsistent rhythm is worrisome.
Trying to paraphrase Zig Ziglar?
Too much dialogue in the opening paragraphs. The narrative is just as important as the dialogue.
Structural errors: 1. "Get in the vehicle Michael." My Dad shouted... Should be: "Get in the vehicle, Michael," my Dad shouted... 2. "I'm not going wi...
You modified this post 4 days ago. You're not allowed to edit your submission after expiration of deadline (in this case, Monday, 12 midnight)!