Let's try it this way; What would their thoughts be (What would they think of me),If I were to say that I no longer want (wish) to be associated with ...

Good use of imagery, especially in S1-S3. The tempo reduced in S4 and S5. It would have been better to use symbolisms to depict the ailment which is t...

Good collabo! You attempted using rhythm in S1 and S5, but this fell short of expectations. Note too that S1 and S5 employed different rhyming schemes...

Deep message! Your attempt at using rhymes in your works tends to hold you back. If you must use rhythm, you must be consistent with a chosen pattern....

Duplicate post.

This is common knowledge.

The first part of the quote doesn't sound right grammatically.

Comic relief! Consider this sentence in Paragraph 3: 'The Nigerian economy can be termed as poor, and no other word fits best to be used other than th...

Yes, indeed. ?

Can you make this more prosaic?

Very nice story, but needs a lot of editing.

The story can be more compelling, less predictable. Take note of punctuations, paragraphing and capitalisations. They were not properly utilized in th...

Great concept! ? ?

A CRITIQUE ON MY SUBLIMITY The poem" my SUBLIMITY" was written by a well seasoned Poet Akinwole John Akintayo in December 2019. He carefully knitted a...

CRITIQUE ON CONFESSION Confession is an excellent poem by the amazing Victor Apata. The twenty line poem is an embodiment of its title, it's written i...