Predictable finish but dark all the same. Well done!

You should always capitalize names of places (villages, towns, suburbs, etc. Work should be properly edited.

Word count (1211 words) exceeds the required limit (300-500).

Posted in wrong forum. Short stories are not meant to be here.

Plenty structural issues, lack of cohesion, misuse of words... But the message sinks in.

The story lacked cohesion... And you don't nod your head in disapproval. You 'shake your head' in disapproval and 'nod it' in approval.

Isn't this familiar??

Makes sense.

Fantastic piece! May we please know who Annylove is? You didn't include her full name. ?

Nice collabo. Rid with grammatical errors though...

Posted in the wrong forum. This is for collabos, not solo entries.

Touching!

The rhymes in S2 were exaggerated...

A strong finish!

"This world will never become betterUnless you rise to your feetWhen others are on their seatBlaming everyone for the world's predicament." This is de...