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Family strokes... Nice! ?

Work should be thoroughly edited.

Nice attempt, but wrought with structural & grammatical errors.

Exceeds word count limit.

S4L6: Should be 'expectation slopes' or 'expectations slope' S5L5: 'Believe' should be 'belief'

S1L9: 'Raising' should be 'racing'. S3L2: 'Kept stilled' should simply be 'Stilled'

Gifted... ? Your rhyming scheme didn't exactly follow though.

Well done, Sahaj. There are still structural deficiencies... And it's not compulsory to use rhythm in your poetry to achieve a desired effect. Just ma...

Beautiful! Well done, Huda!

We'd all be long dead If men were god...

Lovely... ?

Touching... ?

You need to be consistent in use of rhyming schemes...

Fantastic train of thought. Structure could have been better....