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(@yusuf-muyibat)
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A Honey Face

Hello beautiful world!
I amaze you since the day I arrived,
The life on my face, the moves on my eyelid,
This assured you I have come to stay,
I see mama laughing at my first cry,
My first breath come without delay
This is what my face brought, a honey for your endless worry.

Do you wonder the magic in a lady's face?
How a single stare makes men love?
How the world shrink by it beauty?
By a glance even the bravest are turned silly,
Those that keep their head high still looks back,
The sight before them makes their modesty shrink,
Don't pretend for we know you are already compel,
The continues dripping honey makes your throat yearn for a taste.

In the dusk or dawn you lose yourself,
A trace of dark makes us see your true self,
An Alpha searching for it Omega, oh dear wolf!
He doesn't walk around pitching hearts,
The beauty of face is what attracts it scents,
Yes, he finally let go of the pretence,
He was actually attracted by the honey in the face.

As sanity flies away like a dove,
I see a man first licking a honey face,
Their first attraction is where they dive,
The falling of honey down, makes him trace it to other parts,
Please take your time, a continuous hunting deserves a price,
In her honey face, his face got stuck.

Please take it easy on their heart,
A touch of makeup, alluring a burning heart,
Oh! Your face did take away their breath,
Your little addition makes it more bright,
Now the honey on your face turns into light,
From a distance you shine so bright,
A lady's face compel all that is on sight.

©Yusuf Muyibat Avosuahi
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(@penkup)
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Good attempt. However, the work needs to be edited. For example:

This assured you I have come to stay (Word should be had)

How the world shrink by it beauty? (Words should be shrinks and its)

Those that keep their head high still looks back (Word should be look)

Don't pretend for we know you are already compel (Word should be compelled)

The continues dripping honey makes your throat yearn for a taste. (Word should be continuous)


   
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(@penkup)
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There are other similar errors in the text.


   
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