IN ABSENTIA
Hitherto, the moon sat on the edge of my window
where it listened as I told all my woes,
she was radiant and always smiled,
sending to my heart the best of tides.
Days ago, the sun still shone bright from the west
forming a lit scene ; a point of light over my head.
These treat was more than enough
to put my heart off the rough.
But yesterday, the sun was hot like a furnace
and the moon had supposedly taken a walk away from the stars.
They turned from my sight to disappear,
thus, my heart burned down in despair.
A storm had chased the sun,
a lightening had put the moon on a run,
these evil forces birthed by a mother,
it was her! My departed lover.
She took a walk out of my life, easy and simple,
everything, everywhere then became miserable.
Her departure parted happiness and I even,
erupting memories of the earliest humans and the Garden of Eden!
For the first time, I fled from the sky,
my face met it's gaze and I became shy,
for you were not there to enhance her smile,
it's thus been sad, all this while.
I have thus realized I am but empty
whence and I'm without your company,
I have realized that life starts to fleet
the moment you and I stop to meet.
© Aj Maverick
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S2L4:
'To put my heart off the rough...' (The highlighted word isn't a noun, so it's use is inappropriate there. As an adjective, it can't be used as the object of the sentence. It must qualify a noun. Don't take this avoidable risk just for the sake of achieving rhythm!)
S3L3:
'They turned from my sight to disappear...' (This is simply tautology! Use either 'They turned from my sight' or 'They began to disappear')