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GRIEVED HEART

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Israelonoruoiza
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GRIEVED HEART

Like the hottest fire ever
Sending its smoke from a burning face
Up to the beautiful calm sky
The woods that burns are laid furiously in the heart

Seek no further who light the gas
That its flame grows so wild
It's a gasoline, it flight like the air
Which even a friend's voice could light up

Who created this spring
That runs from hurt's shore
Down to the pool of the eyes
And flows down the dry-cheek land

Who broke up the chain
That held anger far away from calm emotion
Anger is with the upper hand
There is no rest anywhere

Heavy rain fell on it
But couldn't quench the fire
That just a little word light up
The heart is grieved

The flaming sword cuts through
The healers couldn't heal it up
As tears flush up each of their words away
The heart seems slippery, it's grieved.

©Israel Onoruoiza


   
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(@ajmaverick)
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Great! 

am3mm10@ptsolest


   
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(@penkup)
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You use singular verbs in place of plural verbs and vice versa. It shouldn't be like that. Check S1L4, S2L1 for example.


   
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Israelonoruoiza
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Noted sir.


   
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