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Israelonoruoiza
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IF

If love is you
I had treat myself never to love
For in you heartbreak is certain
And with your company love is hell.

If your home is love
I had sleep outside like the homeless
Even if cold will rip my heart off
Or freeze my body to the door of death.

If your love is light
I had love to walk alone in darkness
For your light are rays of death
That leads to the path of heartbreak

If your love is a journey
I had never embark on it
For all that awaits is ambush
That leads to the crushing weels of betrayal

If your love is the sky
I had never walk in the shade of its lovely blue light
Or ever stare at the beautiful stars
For even the joy it gives my heart will turn sad when it rains

If your love is life
I had never love to live
For in your life death waits
That tortures even my faith

©Israel Onoruoiza
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Nice piece, but the 2nd line of virtually every stanza is structurally defective and grammatically incorrect.


   
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I would instead of I had. 

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