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 huda
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I choose you to be my everything or anything
For that, I won't regret if it turns me into nothing 
I choose you to make me or break me 
For that, I won't cry when it hurts me or sorrow intake 
I choose you to be my absolute happiness or never-ending grief 
For that, I won't blame you whenever I am not relieved 
I choose you to be only one or cared for none 
For that, I may not hear the sound of when it's done
I choose you to be my master no matter here or hereafter 
For that, there would be no rejection letters 
I choose you to be my only man so that only you can end or begin 
For that, I am the happiest prisoner in my cage
I choose you to treat me or defeat me
For that, there would be no winning and no losing 
I choose you to be my whole or my lost hole
For that, I won't curse anyone but my soul
I choose you to be my eternal love or infinite burn
For that, there is no way out and nowhere to run
I choose you to be my everlasting shine 
For that, if it's my demise to a great shrine 
And what I choose was never meant to be destined...

©Huda Tariq

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Try break the poem into stanzas. L7 doesn't sound right...


   
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(@penkup)
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Other structural & grammatical errors are evident...


   
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