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IF I'M FIRE, WHAT ARE YOU?

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Israelonoruoiza
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IF I'M FIRE, WHAT ARE YOU?

If i'm the fire that burns impediments
Heat up the wheels of success
Raid the horizon of a mucky house
Or the ruin table of the perverts

You would say that;
You're a flame prayer that travels to the heavens
A fire's shadow that lits up the hem of hardwork
Or the hidden heat that hasten success

If i'm the fire that blazes the heart of mockers
The fire that trips to the home of swindlers
The fire that checks the sacks of looters
And echoe their nakedness to the world's ear

You will say also that;
You're a coal that glows in fury
The coal that rot oppressors
The coal of fire that lives not of the wood
But of the voice of vengeance

If i'm fire, you're a flame
If i'm fire, you're a coal
I'm the fire they talked about
The fire that burns in hell!

©Israel Onoruoiza
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Do your spell checks, e.g.,

'And echoe their nakedness to the world's ear' (word should be 'echo')

Also mind your pluralisations, e.g.,

'Or the hidden heat that hasten success' (word should be 'hastens')

Also your capitalisations, e.g.,

'I'm' should not be written as 'i'm'.

OK?

This post was modified 6 years ago by Dr. Kennedy O. Obohwemu

   
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Israelonoruoiza
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Yes sir...Okay.


   
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