When I observe my life, I can't help
but wonder how I came this far.
I've been like a swallow flying
around in this world of opportunities,
not operating beyond my reach,
always settling for minute things
that are quite easy to get.
I seldom have the drive to forge ahead;
to steer out of my comfort zone
and effect things in my favour,
Instead, I live life like there's
no tomorrow; without plans.
Not that I haven't tried,
to see beyond my horizon
but in this wide, wild world
I'm usually the bullseye
for self-esteem threatening blows...
When I observe my life,
my mind travels and wander
looking for the best way
to describe a life that's been
under the aegis of simple words,
Simple words of mama and papa,
rarely unspoken, that's kept me going
even though my life has been
on a different track from the world's,
destined to collide–without doubt.
Those simple words: prayers,
always polishing my weak armour,
Is the reason why myself,
without quality, still exists–
for the time being.
Will I be farther than this?
If not only mama and papa,
but you also, prays for me.
©Akinwole John Akintayo
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A Review of "Pray For Me" Written by Akinwole John Akintayo.
The personae of this poem tells us that the reason for the life and fulfillment enjoyed by the personae is prayers.
In the first stanza of the poem, we see the personae reminiscences about life and the successes the personae enjoy in wonderment. The personae during that stream of consciousness tells us that "I've been like a swallow flying/ around in this world of opportunities ...." Things, as they are, the personae tells us that they are as a result of the "Simple words of mama and papa/rarely unspoken, that's kept me going ...."
The personae attributes prayers to be the reason for having lived so long.
The subject matter of the poem is gratitude. The themes include: ambition, longevity etc.
Recommendations:
The whole of last stanza needs reworking. It is not clear whether it is asking for prayers or it's grateful for prayers.
Lawal Eneye.