HARMATTAN
Harmattan oh Harmattan!
why did you wake me up from sleep
this morning, with so much gaze?
stretching your hands towards
me as if to bless my cozy face?
Harmattan oh Harmattan!
So dry and rusty,
your breeze makes my skin,
I'm left with nothing,
than to rub cream on my chin.
Harmattan oh Harmattan!
You woke me from bed,
With so fog and cold,
the sound of your gossiping wind,
Slaps dryness in my head.
Harmattan oh Harmattan!
You came with chilling mornings,
And left with chilling nights,
The long rainy season has ended,
So your season has just started.
Harmattan oh Harmattan!
You came with so much chilliness,
embracing our skin with dryness,
And you stole our warmness.
Harmattan oh Harmattan!
Your prevailing dusty haze
slapped us with so much gaze.
Harmattan oh Harmattan!
What should I offer you?
My cream or my skin,
For you to hold your chill?
© Samuel Junior Irusota
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A Review of "Harmattan" Written by Samuel Junior Irusota.
The personae of this poem recounts the ordeals the personae pass through while in the season (particular to West Africa)– Harmattan.
In the poem "Harmattan", the usual reaction faced by those exposed to the harsh weather is what we find in this poem. Example of this include: the cold breeze of the season "you came with chilling mornings, ...", the dry skin "embracing our skin with dryness" etc.
The effect of the season as we see on the personae is it forces the personae to apply cream in order to wade off dry skin.
The subject matter of the poem is torture. The themes include: weather, cold, season.
Recommendations:
The poet should work on the individual words of his piece. Certain words do not agree with certain words. Example of errors at the level of syntax include: "with so fog and cold", "slaps dryness in my head", "you came with so much chillness" the list continues.
The poet should also read materials about the correct use of punctuation marks. Example of the flaws made by the poet includes: "so dry and rusty,/your breeze makes my skin". The poet should remove the comma after "rusty".
Lawal Eneye